I replied to your second post first and then realized I needed to be able to re-read this one to reply to the points in it.
Is it Friday yet?
The Empire of the West covers most of modern Spain and Portugal plus a good bit of the parts of N. Africa directly opposite. In Africa it shares a border with the lands ruled by Carthage which in turn borders Lower Egypt (the North), which is still un-renamed. Upper Egypt(the South) is currently in my notes as Khemet and at this time a separate nation ruled by a non-human Queen.
The peoples of Khemet are darker with mixture with the Nubians becoming more and more common as you get further South. The Egyptians (whatever I call them) are the lighter skinned Arabic types with some mixture from other Mediterranean peoples.
Now, the use of Khemet is wrong and it's an error that's held over from years ago that I'm fighting with myself over. Of the two Egypts the one that really should be Khemet is Upper Egypt since the name means "The black lands" and refers to the area that the inundation made suitable for farming and cities and Upper Egypt with its vast delta has the greater farm lands.
We've used Khemet to refer to Lower Egypt within the game for so long it's confusing to me to change but as soon as I find a name to substitute for it I know I need to do it.
The desert areas were "The red lands" but I've lost what that translates into.
In Europe I'm debating giving France to the Western Empire. The British Isles are iffy. Ireland is ruled by the kings of Tara but I'm not sure of the rest. They may have to pay tribute to or be directly ruled by the WE. In any case the Roman Empire borders it to the East and probably has from Germany over to somewhere around Hungary or Romania.
I wish I had a good map in Jpeg format and Photoshop.
My debate on the voyage goes like this:
On the one hand I can use it to introduce the nations and peoples of this alternate universe. On the other that could turn it into a boring travelogue. But, says I, I could introduce a little sub-adventure somewhere, like maybe Carthage, that could foreshadow the plot by the big bads that Heneter and company will end up neck deep in.
And then I realize I need to work out Carthage in more detail and I get sucked back into the world building. Which was really useful in a recent adventure I ran for the game. Not so useful to making progress on the book.
Punctuation is my bane since, even when I'm sure of a rule, I can often fail to apply it in my rush to type something and then miss it on a re-reading. For some reason lately I've found myself typing a period instead of a question mark and having to go back and change it at least 50% of the time.
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Re: Critique
Date: 2007-03-08 02:04 am (UTC)Is it Friday yet?
The Empire of the West covers most of modern Spain and Portugal plus a good bit of the parts of N. Africa directly opposite. In Africa it shares a border with the lands ruled by Carthage which in turn borders Lower Egypt (the North), which is still un-renamed. Upper Egypt(the South) is currently in my notes as Khemet and at this time a separate nation ruled by a non-human Queen.
The peoples of Khemet are darker with mixture with the Nubians becoming more and more common as you get further South. The Egyptians (whatever I call them) are the lighter skinned Arabic types with some mixture from other Mediterranean peoples.
Now, the use of Khemet is wrong and it's an error that's held over from years ago that I'm fighting with myself over. Of the two Egypts the one that really should be Khemet is Upper Egypt since the name means "The black lands" and refers to the area that the inundation made suitable for farming and cities and Upper Egypt with its vast delta has the greater farm lands.
We've used Khemet to refer to Lower Egypt within the game for so long it's confusing to me to change but as soon as I find a name to substitute for it I know I need to do it.
The desert areas were "The red lands" but I've lost what that translates into.
In Europe I'm debating giving France to the Western Empire. The British Isles are iffy. Ireland is ruled by the kings of Tara but I'm not sure of the rest. They may have to pay tribute to or be directly ruled by the WE. In any case the Roman Empire borders it to the East and probably has from Germany over to somewhere around Hungary or Romania.
I wish I had a good map in Jpeg format and Photoshop.
My debate on the voyage goes like this:
On the one hand I can use it to introduce the nations and peoples of this alternate universe. On the other that could turn it into a boring travelogue. But, says I, I could introduce a little sub-adventure somewhere, like maybe Carthage, that could foreshadow the plot by the big bads that Heneter and company will end up neck deep in.
And then I realize I need to work out Carthage in more detail and I get sucked back into the world building. Which was really useful in a recent adventure I ran for the game. Not so useful to making progress on the book.
Punctuation is my bane since, even when I'm sure of a rule, I can often fail to apply it in my rush to type something and then miss it on a re-reading. For some reason lately I've found myself typing a period instead of a question mark and having to go back and change it at least 50% of the time.